Simplifying Legal Communication

Summary

Simplifying legal documents is crucial for clarity. Focus on key points like improving offers and securing bank guarantees. This approach ensures all parties understand the essential aspects of the agreement. If needed, consult a real estate attorney for further guidance.

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Dear Sir, We, the following undersigned members, request you to conduct a Special General Body Meeting with the following Agenda: *. To request Antariksh Realtors Ltd. in writing to significantly upgrade its offer dated 3rd May * in terms of RERA Carpet Area, Individual Member Corpus, and Rent offered in the redevelopment process of Suyog CHS. *. To request Antariksh Realtors Ltd. in writing to include a Bank Guarantee and/or Lien (First Charge) on specific number of sale flats of new building to be constructed in favour of Suyog CHSL as part of terms of the upgraded offer. (Number of Lien Flats to be mutually decided by Suyog CHSL and Antariksh Realtors Ltd.) Thanking You,
Sure, here is a simplified version of the letter:
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Dear Sir,
We, the undersigned members, request a Special General Body Meeting to discuss the following:
*. Ask Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to improve their offer dated 3rd May *, regarding RERA Carpet Area, Individual Member Corpus, and Rent for Suyog CHS redevelopment.
*. Request Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to provide a Bank Guarantee or Lien on a certain number of sale flats in the new building for Suyog CHSL. The number of Lien Flats will be decided mutually.
Thank you,
[Your Names]
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Does this look good to you?
The point of lien on certain number of sale flats...etc is complicated.Whereas the bank guarantee is a necessary ask
I understand that the point about the lien on sale flats seems complicated, and the bank guarantee is essential. Let's simplify it further:
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Dear Sir,
We, the undersigned members, request a Special General Body Meeting to discuss the following:
*. Ask Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to improve their offer dated 3rd May *, regarding RERA Carpet Area, Individual Member Corpus, and Rent for Suyog CHS redevelopment.
*. Request Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to provide a Bank Guarantee for the new building for Suyog CHSL.
Thank you,
[Your Names]
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Does this look better?
Is it still correctly worded?
Case Rating: *
Yes, the simplified version of the letter is correctly worded. It addresses the key points clearly and concisely, focusing on the bank guarantee and improving the offer. Here is the final version:
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Dear Sir,
We, the undersigned members, request a Special General Body Meeting to discuss the following:
*. Ask Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to improve their offer dated 3rd May *, regarding RERA Carpet Area, Individual Member Corpus, and Rent for Suyog CHS redevelopment.
*. Request Antariksh Realtors Ltd. to provide a Bank Guarantee for the new building for Suyog CHSL.
Thank you,
[Your Names]
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